A guy prostrated on the ground, uttered these words to the girl's dad,
"I'd hold your daughter's hand throughout this journey..
I'd caress her and never let her out of my shadow..
I'd walk beside her forever..
And will absorb her in me if ever lightning struck..
Trust me Sir.."
Only that he was quadriplegic!
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This is my first attempt at 55 Fiction...So bricks, bats and bouquets are welcome..But I really want your feedback on this one!!
30 comments:
maybe he had discovered the cure and he was gonna get cured the very next day
i was gonna give u the feedback in the shoutbox using emoticons but its not working, there is feedjit stuff in there, anyway, accha hai ji
Hi Jaunty,
this is a good start..:)
Keep expressing..:)
fist of all i didnt knew what this fiction 55 was...so i googled it..read few fictions on other blogs and among all of them yours is the best...
your first attempt is indeed commendable
Nice attempt :)
cool yaar
Hey that was a nice attempt. Wasn't expecting the climax to be like that. Liked it. Keep them coming. :-)
nice attempt... :)
@Number:Thanks a lott..And well that'll need a sequel then..
@Pramoda:Thanks re..Ur comments are really encouraging!
@Skywalker:OOOhhhh...That's kind of you to say something like that..thank you so very much sir!!
@AD:Thanks gal...keep ur comments flowing in...:)
hugs!!
@Vandi:Thanks gal...long time....!!
@Raksha:Hey welcome to my blog...I'd love to see you around!!
@Karthik:Hey thanks re...so wat wer u expecting...d father bashing d guy...or the other way around.."Apni ladki ka haath mere haath me de de!!":P
lol..
@Anoop:Thanks boy..welcome back..haven't seen you around for a long time...now keep the cmmnts cmn...:)
hey thanks for your "random visit" to my blog and thanks for the comment as well.
you urself have a very nice blog...i'm following you now...
btw...i'm also a comp engg student, now in final year of my btech...
hope to c u around...
happy blogging...tc
well, this is cool and sensible...
but u see, guys do this in a little different way...
i'll be posting a reply to this post on my blog...keep visiting.
@Gautam:Thanks for coming back...
I didn't unnerstand wat u meant...guys do it in a different way as in fiction 55 u're talking about??Now I await a reply on ur blog soon..
N thanks for following buddy...wud love to see u around!!
@jaunty - nope...i was not talkin bout fiction but about how a boy says this to a girl's father.
the proper format is a little different...hehe
that's what i said i'll be posting...
very nice attempt kudiye:) do sum more...:)
god bless n hugs,
divsi
ur first fiction 55....nice one....it was easily understood...keep writing regularly grl..
:)
@Gautam: well.then m lukin forward to get the clearer picture of how a boy does it...hehe!!!:)
@divsi: Oh thanks kudiye...really wanted ur encouragement badly....tc sweets!!:)
@Sukriti:Thank u gal!!but understandable....aise samajh nahi aata hai kya..???? :o
N regular I will be...just need a push...de diya kar...m lazier than that lazy billi garfield...u noe naa.... ;)
hugs :):D
Good one! Different from the ones I read usually :)
oh yeah long time,,,i've become too lazy actually :P
engineers u knw ;)
@Dhanya:Thanks gal!!:)
@Vandi:yeah I noe...lazier than lazy billi garfield...like I said...;)
lol:D
i ws talking abt d understanding of dis post vich ws a fiction 55
A great first attempt I say!!
Keep 'em coming. :)
Cheers
@Sukriti:Ok..dear....I understand!!:D
@bondgal:Thanks..sweets!!
I needed encouragemnet badly...
hugs!:D
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