Monday, November 16, 2009

Take My Hand And We'd Walk The Distance

A guy prostrated on the ground, uttered these words to the girl's dad,

"I'd hold your daughter's hand throughout this journey..

 I'd caress her and never let her out of my shadow..

 I'd walk beside her forever..

 And will absorb her in me if ever lightning struck..

 Trust me Sir.."

Only that he was quadriplegic!

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This is my first attempt at 55 Fiction...So bricks, bats and bouquets are welcome..But I really want your feedback on this one!!

30 comments:

Number said...

maybe he had discovered the cure and he was gonna get cured the very next day

Number said...

i was gonna give u the feedback in the shoutbox using emoticons but its not working, there is feedjit stuff in there, anyway, accha hai ji

Being Pramoda... said...

Hi Jaunty,

this is a good start..:)

Keep expressing..:)

Skywalker said...

fist of all i didnt knew what this fiction 55 was...so i googled it..read few fictions on other blogs and among all of them yours is the best...

Americanising Desi said...

your first attempt is indeed commendable

Raksha Raman said...

Nice attempt :)

vAnDaNa sLaThIa said...

cool yaar

Karthik said...

Hey that was a nice attempt. Wasn't expecting the climax to be like that. Liked it. Keep them coming. :-)

Anoop said...

nice attempt... :)

Jaunty anima said...

@Number:Thanks a lott..And well that'll need a sequel then..

@Pramoda:Thanks re..Ur comments are really encouraging!

Jaunty anima said...

@Skywalker:OOOhhhh...That's kind of you to say something like that..thank you so very much sir!!

Jaunty anima said...

@AD:Thanks gal...keep ur comments flowing in...:)
hugs!!

@Vandi:Thanks gal...long time....!!

@Raksha:Hey welcome to my blog...I'd love to see you around!!

Jaunty anima said...

@Karthik:Hey thanks re...so wat wer u expecting...d father bashing d guy...or the other way around.."Apni ladki ka haath mere haath me de de!!":P
lol..

Jaunty anima said...

@Anoop:Thanks boy..welcome back..haven't seen you around for a long time...now keep the cmmnts cmn...:)

Gautam said...

hey thanks for your "random visit" to my blog and thanks for the comment as well.

you urself have a very nice blog...i'm following you now...
btw...i'm also a comp engg student, now in final year of my btech...

hope to c u around...
happy blogging...tc

Gautam said...

well, this is cool and sensible...
but u see, guys do this in a little different way...
i'll be posting a reply to this post on my blog...keep visiting.

Jaunty anima said...

@Gautam:Thanks for coming back...
I didn't unnerstand wat u meant...guys do it in a different way as in fiction 55 u're talking about??Now I await a reply on ur blog soon..

N thanks for following buddy...wud love to see u around!!

Gautam said...

@jaunty - nope...i was not talkin bout fiction but about how a boy says this to a girl's father.
the proper format is a little different...hehe
that's what i said i'll be posting...

divsi said...

very nice attempt kudiye:) do sum more...:)
god bless n hugs,
divsi

Sukriti said...

ur first fiction 55....nice one....it was easily understood...keep writing regularly grl..
:)

Jaunty anima said...

@Gautam: well.then m lukin forward to get the clearer picture of how a boy does it...hehe!!!:)

Jaunty anima said...

@divsi: Oh thanks kudiye...really wanted ur encouragement badly....tc sweets!!:)

Jaunty anima said...

@Sukriti:Thank u gal!!but understandable....aise samajh nahi aata hai kya..???? :o

N regular I will be...just need a push...de diya kar...m lazier than that lazy billi garfield...u noe naa.... ;)

hugs :):D

Dhanya said...

Good one! Different from the ones I read usually :)

vAnDaNa sLaThIa said...

oh yeah long time,,,i've become too lazy actually :P

engineers u knw ;)

Jaunty anima said...

@Dhanya:Thanks gal!!:)

@Vandi:yeah I noe...lazier than lazy billi garfield...like I said...;)
lol:D

Sukriti said...

i ws talking abt d understanding of dis post vich ws a fiction 55

bondgal_rulz said...

A great first attempt I say!!

Keep 'em coming. :)

Cheers

Jaunty anima said...

@Sukriti:Ok..dear....I understand!!:D

Jaunty anima said...

@bondgal:Thanks..sweets!!
I needed encouragemnet badly...

hugs!:D