Thursday, December 3, 2009

Breathing for her breath

Curled in her bed with a book on her side..

She plays with her locks, lost in deep thoughts..

She had fallen in love and her life eversince had been a joyride..

Never did she contemplate tomorrow, engrossed in fun of all sorts..


The train of thoughts cease to come to a halt..

Making her reminisce the day they tied the nuptial knot..

They had held each other's hands and walked every step in unison..

Those holy promises and the holy fire were a mark of benison..


He had said," I vow to take care of her, pamper her, fulfil her needs..

Trace her footsteps and be along forever, protect her in my embrace..

I'll never embarass her with harangue, I'll keep her happy forever!"

Inside, she grinned sheepishly, and said a virtual 'Amen!'


Her emotions outwitting her control, a tear rolled down her cheek..

Another memory came in foreground while the emotional outburst had reached its peak..

The day she revealed that she was in a family way..

His happiness knew no bounds, he held her like a kid and that was her besttt day..


All of a sudden, a harsh reality struck her like a bolt from the skies..

Whatever the memories be, the outcome of their test on the plateau of love was not nice..

Though sanguine in true sense, she was slowly and steadily losing her sanity..

She had lost support from all sides and her situation demonstrated pity..


She stands up with her long locks on one side and walks in front of the mirror..

With eyes swelled with anger, a questioning look on her face, answers now clearer..

Weren't those promises, those amorous talks nothing but moonshine..


Fighting her tears, she looks at her tresses and picks up a comb..

She's the mother who carries the burden of a baby daughter in her womb..

41 comments:

Being Pramoda... said...

Hi Jauty,

my day has stared with ur post..and i remember this post fr my life time.. it was so touching and i liked the title very much ..

very good writer u are..keep it up dear..

Karthik said...

A big story told in such a simple way and with few lines!
It's beautiful!
Too much of emosional attyachar there, :D but the way you've written it made me read twice. No re, not because I didn't understand the first time, but because I loved the flow of words so much. :-)
Keep going! :-)

divsi said...

B.E.A.U.T.I.f.U.L!:))

very very well crafted:) n sucha meaningful message embedded inside...
i thot it wud be another love story...but u kept me hooked:)

way to go gal!! way to go!

Ekam said...

Beautiful ... even i thought it wAS a love story ... :)

- Sugar Cube - said...

Wow ! that was unpredictable , sensible and very well knitted.

Blogger doesn't have the option...I wish I could 'Fav' this :P

Great work.

vAnDaNa sLaThIa said...

awesome

akanksha said...

arey it's u very wel written..
Atlast i read ur blog

Yellow Tulip said...

one of ur bests so far dear...beautiful:)

Sukriti said...

wow..grl this ws best...a bitter truth of lyf crafted beautifully...

Rahil said...

ausumn..

guptasupriya2506 said...

a touchy 1....
gud goin grl...!!

Destiny's child... said...

I really didn't expect 'this' sort of an end! Never knew you could tell a long tale in just a few lines!:) Keep writing
And thanks for your warm comment on my blog :)

Jaunty anima said...

@Pramoda:Ohh..Thanks a lot prams...That's a huge compliment for me...really!!M so glad u liked it!!

@Karthik:Thanku..Thanku!!Made you read twice..M glad u liked it...n this emotional atyachar is happening everywhere yaar..n it's painful to see women succumbing and becoming a part of this crime..Sad it is!!

Jaunty anima said...

@Divsi:Thanks re!!

I just started off writing something...didn't know initially what it was going to be about..started it as a love story and the end result was this...So there u c!!

Jaunty anima said...

@Ekam:Thanks a ton kudiye!!!

So everyone thought it was a love story...well honestly speaking don't expect a love story on this page coz m really bad at explaining the nuances and intricacies of love...Just too bad!!!

Jaunty anima said...

@Sugarcube:Oooh!!!That's sweet of u to say that Sugar!!Ur comments are always sugary sweet...If people get diabetic here on Blogsville,, we'll blame it on you!!

Jaunty anima said...

@Vandi:Thanku hunz!!

@Aki:My lil babe!!
I'm honoured to have you here...
N m soooo glad u liked it...
made my day sweetie!~

Jaunty anima said...

@Tulip:Thanks sooo much tulip!
Hope to learn n get better with each post!!
I have bigger poets like u to inspire me!!!

Jaunty anima said...

@Sukriti:Thanku so vry mch babe!!

@Rahil:Thanku jee!!!

Jaunty anima said...

@Sups:Thanku re!!

Aaj to kya baat hai...aki aur ab tu bhi...
Made my day...u dearies!!:)

Jaunty anima said...

@Destiny's child:Thanks..n Welcome to my blog dear!!!

Dhanya said...

So well written dear! Beautiful...

Americanising Desi said...

dil khol k nahi bol sakti. my heart is scrunched

Skywalker said...

amazing and marvelous 5 STARS for it. :)

Skywalker said...

actually m not someone who can rate this :)..

Shilpa Garg said...

Hi! You have a very beautiful expression in the form of words!! Liked it!!
Cheers :)

Jaunty anima said...

@Dhanya: Thanks a lot dear!!!

@Seher: Ummm...I understand...:)

Jaunty anima said...

@Skywalker:Well thanku sir..n well did I tell u, U inspired me to come up wid good meaningful posts...

Now I'd avoid writing faltoo, good-4-nothing posts...I said I'll try...n wo bhi my best waala try!!:)

Jaunty anima said...

@Shilpa:It's so good to have u on my blog!!
N thanks a ton!!It feels good to know u liked it...:)

Pesto Sauce said...

Good you posted your pic...you look pretty

nesquarx.com said...

Impressive! You young lady have a good grip on twists.

Jaunty anima said...

@Pesto:Thanku!!I wonder if u read my post!!!

@nesquarx:Welcome to my blogg!!
N Thanku so mch boy!!
Hope to see ya around!!

Manju said...

the way you said 'burden'....so sad D:

Vijay said...

Hi Friend ur doing an excellent work.. Can we exchange links...

яノςんム said...

and a tight slap on the face of 'love' :) harsh reality.. many of us go through the same.. i wonder if a day will come when daughters will be welcomed.. Loved ur expressions and choice of words :)

Jaunty anima said...

@Manju:Was meant to be..after all it's such a sensitive issue..

@Vijay:Thanks boy..sure..that's y we all are here on blogger...nahi?

Jaunty anima said...

@Richa:Thanks RIcha!!
I wish d day comes...n noe wat it's not onloy d uneducated lot...but d educated ones too..tatz d sadder part of d story...Nway hoping!!!

Raksha Raman said...

Wow!! Stunning is the word to describe this post!! The words are woven in such a lovely way and the result is so evidently superb!

Jaunty anima said...

@Raksha:Thanks a ton gal!!

Stay around!!:)

Sorcerer said...

simply...awesome!!!

Jaunty anima said...

Sorcy...thanks a ton...!!!:)